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1 Idea and Story Help on 6/22/2009, 7:41 pm

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(I don't know where this should go XD)
Well, For awhile I was working on my Own Story, a Fanfic, But I got stuck on the begining of it, and never went back to it, I don't want it to die, so I was wondering if anyone had any awesome ideas to help me out with it.
Here's the Story I've got in Mind so Far.

A Young 16 year Old girl Emma, Lives with her Brother, and her Single Mother, She gets Assigned to the Job of doing the books, and Such at a Local Museum, When one Night she is attacked by a robber trying to Steal the Paintings, And is nearly killed, when somehow she is Saved, And She wonders why. She gets Home And then finds she's being haunted by a ghost, of a Young Boy who needs her help, he needs to Find out who killed him, and How he Died.

I Have The Story so Far, Written Down, And Picture of the Characters.

The Story So Far:
Emma Andersons' never thought anything interesting would ever happen in her life, not on a day like anyother, but she guessed today had to be speical, it was carceer week at school and each student signed up for something different she only hoped she wouldn't be stuck with a 'Stinker".

Emma got out of bed and went to her closet pulling out her favoriite dark blue running suit. she threw it on the bed and went to the bathroom to get ready.
She brushed her hair and her teeth, and then opened a small blue box by the sink covered in stars, inside it was different shaped hair clips, she took out one shaped like a flower with pink petals and slipped it into her hair, she then looked in the mirror smiling one of her goffy smiles and then frowned. "well I guess this is good as it's gonna get" she sighed, then she went back to her bedroom grabbing her running suit throwing it on, "I can't waste anymore time, I've got to hurry, I don't wanna be late today!" She said to herself, grabbing her Back pac she ran out of her room and looked back at the one across the hall. "BYE MOM! I'M GOING!" She called out, then dashed out the door, Her Mother's Door was open just a piece just for her to the kitchen door slam, her mother sat up on the bed her face hidden by the shadows of the darkend Room, she gave a long depressed sigh.
Emma Went outside and around her house over to a bush where her blue bike was parked, she put her backpack in the basket and jumped on, she turned her bike around and headed off for School.

(Cue intro Song, Feelin' Fine.)

Emma Rode by her Neighbor Hood and all her Friends houses, She Rode by the shops on the Street corners in the town. People would wave to her as she'd ride pass, in this town everyone one knew everybody else, Even since childhood, they'd all keep a secret or two.
She stopped at the Grosserry Store an old woman came outside to greet her and gave her a wave.
"Hellow Emma, did you Manage to eat something this morning, dear?" The Old Woman asked her smiling, Emma Looked at her, then shook her head, "No, I didn't this Morning, Misses Selmo" she Said in reply, The Old Woman grabbed an apple from her stand "Well that won't do, dear!" she said "Here take this" Tossing the Apple to Emma. Emma raised up her arm and caught the apple. "Thanks Misses selmo, but you know you really don't have to, I can't pay for this." she Said twisting the Stim off the apple.
The Old Woman only Smiled. "Maybe not now, Dear, bue Maybe from that new job? huh." Emma Could Only Smirk, "well See, Miss Selmo, bye!" She said as she rode off, The woman Waved with a goodbye in reply and went back inside. Emma Rode by the Small Park she used to play at when she was tiny.
She then rode by the Police Station, where out sat Officer Nick, He was a Tall, Dark Haired young Man, in his mid 30s, late 20s, Dressed in his uniform colors of black and Blue. "Hi Emma!" he Waved her down.
Emma Stopped her bike Again, "Hi Officer Nick." she replied. "I can't stay Long or I'll be late for Schoo-!!!!"
The Officer had suddenly walked over to her and then threw his arms around her in a loving embrace. Emma went Red, letting him hug her like he always did.
"You've gotten so Big!" he said Smiling to her, an annoyed Sweat drop ran down the side of her head. "that's really nice, Nick, But you seen me yesterday..." she said then thought to herself "and now your saying I'm Fat." She gave a little pout.


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2 Re: Idea and Story Help on 7/30/2009, 1:46 pm

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Can I marry Officer Nick? So, she's on her way to school or to work? If she's on her way to school, set up her day so that odd things happen all day. That will give you a chance to introduce the ghost later on. If she has a weird day and then is miraculously saved later on, it will be more believable when you introduce the ghost. But then again, I don't know where the ghost came from, so that idea may conflict with what you had in mind for the story. The ghost has to have some point of origin and not just pop up out of nowhere, know what I mean? Example: If he's attached to the museum, skip over a lot of details of Emma's day at school and tell about weird things happening to her at work. If he's attached to the school or her home, then why is he showing up just now? You've got a good start, some vivid images. I hope I have helped you figure out a direction to go in so you can flesh it out some more. I want to read more of it when you write it! And more Officer Nick please!

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3 Re: Idea and Story Help on 7/31/2009, 8:11 am

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Thank you Ther. I will be hopefully writing more soon, with More of Officer Nick.
but for now, I have a Picture of the Two Main Characters for you:


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4 Re: Idea and Story Help on 7/31/2009, 11:41 am

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Super cute! I'm really looking forward to more of the story with Officer Nick!

Btw, you said this is a fanfic, or it isn't?

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5 Re: Idea and Story Help on 8/1/2009, 3:21 pm

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Well, it's not really a fanfic, it's mostly just a made up story. but I based parts of it that are to come on this Funky DS Game called "Trace Memory" and I based another part on something I saw on "Scarrest Places on Earth"


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